User:Elisabeth.Lavi/Affect (psychology)/Alexandrebd Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elisabeth.Lavi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Elisabeth.Lavi/Affect_%28psychology%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Affect (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Positives:

- Great definition and incite into what exactly affect in psychology is.

- Great use of vocabulary, easy to understand but not too simple.

- Lead is nice and concise, gets straight to the point, no use of filler words.

- Every sentence is relevant, there is no "fluff".

- Good use of examples to inform us on what affect can be.

- References are reliable and simple to use.

- Grammar is good, no serious grammatical errors that would affect our comprehension of the text.

To improve:

- Be careful to not be repetitive, for example under the affect section, the word affect is repeated almost every sentence. We understand what the topic is and maybe if you replace that word, it could flow smoother.

- Could possibly add a bit more to the section of "Affect Display" and give everyday examples the reader could relate to.

- Add a link at the end of the Arousal edit (begins with "It is important to note...") to the source you obtained it from.

Extra:

- Be sure to remove the repetition of the lead and the first paragraph. The second one (that you guys wrote) is the better one since it includes a more detailed explanation but be sure to add the citations and links on psychology, feelings, affection and mood from the previous edit.

- Overall great edits that are very informative and improve the article!