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Choi Young-ae
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 * Choi Young-ae
 * I have chosen to evaluate this article as Choi Young-ae is a South Korean human rights activist and her position makes her relevant to my current course at Johns Hopkins University on women and the vote.

Lead

 * Lead evaluation

Because the article is quite short, there is no "table of contents" section and therefore the "lead" and "content" sections blend together. However, I will analyze the first paragraph as the "lead."

When looking at this article, the first thing that I read is: "This is a Korean name; the family name is Choi." Now, here, I am confused. Before even reading about Choi Young-ae, I am given this sentence — already disorientating me as the reader. After those comments, the next sentence provides Choi Young-ae's name and date of birth in both Korean and English form, very important to understanding her as a South Korean. The sentence then begins to describe her current position. There is no brief description of the article's major sections as there is not enough information provided to have sections.

The next sentence shares one of her main accomplishments as the first woman to lead the National Human Rights Commission of South Korea. However, it then ends with the fact that she is the first chairperson with "no background of legal profession." Giving the writer the benefit of the doubt, the writer might have included that part as it shows how she is capable beyond the stereotypical experiences needed for the position. However, this ending just leads the reader to assume that she is not qualified for the job as there is no redeeming positive end to this sentence, like the fact that she still is very educated and has graduated from Ewha Womans University with a bachelor's degree in religious studies and a Masters in Women's studies. That bit of information on her education is shoved to the bottom of the article without any transition or conclusion.

Content evaluation
The content does a good job of following Choi Young-ae's career chronologically, with the latest information being her nomination in July 2018 to a committee involving President Moon. However, the article lacks a lot of depth in regards to Choi Young-ae's work. There is not enough detail on her projects, her achievements, and all the reasonings in between. The article acts as if it is listing a timeline without emphasis on topics like what actually was her "instrumental role in establishing legal foundation for creation of the commission" or why she resigned "for the chairperson." This type of listing makes it hard to become engaged with Choi Young-ae as a figure because there are no details and specifics that paint her as a person.

Tone and balance evaluation
The article does a good job remaining neutral only because there is no real opportunity to become biased as the article is mostly just a list of her accomplishments.

Sources and references evaluation
The article is backed up by five sources, most of them pretty recent: published in the years 2018 or 2019. All links work but the fourth link ("Women's rights advocate named human rights chief". koreatimes. 2018-07-17. Retrieved 2019-07-06.) as it reads: "We apologize for any inconvenience caused. The address of the requested page is incorrectly entered or cannot be used due to the change or deletion of the page address. Please double check the address of the page you requested. If the problem persists, please contact our Customer Center. Thank You."

These sources are reliable secondary sources of information as they include acclaimed publishers like The Korea Times, The Korea Herald, and the Korea Bizwire. However, in order to write more about Choi Young-ae, more secondary sources must be analyzed in order to properly inform the article.

Organization evaluation
The article has organization issues. There are a variety of grammar errors and unreadable sentences. (Below are examples of grammatical errors and my corrections.)

(1) "She was previously worked at the commission as its first secretary-general and standing-commissioner." This should read: "She has previously worked at the commission as its first secretary-general and standing-commissioner."

(2) "She played an instrumental role in establishing legal foundation for creation of the commission in late 1990s." This should read: "She played an instrumental role in establishing legal foundation for the creation of the commission in the late 1990s."

(3) "For over three decades, Choi worked for advancement of human rights - on issues of women's rights and survivors and victims of sexual violence in particular." This should read: "For over three decades, Choi worked for the advancement of human rights, particularly on the rights of women and survivors and victims of sexual violence."

(4) "In July 2018 President Moon selected and nominated Choi as the chairperson for fixed term of three years out of three potential candidates chosen by the first-ever committee specifically formed to recommend to the president for this position upon first-ever open recruitment." This sentence is so extremely hard to read and this is problematic as this is the sentence concludes Choi Young-ae's career.

Images and media evaluation
Other than the biographical photo of her, there are no images in this article to guide the writing. There are no copyright violations with her biographical photo but it is licensed under the Korea Open Government License Type I: Attribution.

Talk page evaluation
On the talk page, there is only mentions of the different scopes the article is part of: "WikiProject Biography," "WikiProject Korea," and "WikiProject Women."

Overall evaluation
The article is strong in that it makes it quite clear that Choi Young-ae is an accomplished woman and has made major strides in Korea in terms of Women's rights throughout her entire career. However, the article is underdeveloped and therefore does a disservice to Choi Youngae's work. There are no elaborations on her accomplishments and no discussions on her achievements or awards. Additionally, the article is riddled with so many grammar mistakes and poorly structured sentences that the little there is to read about her becomes difficult. The article could also be improved if there were relevant images that guided the reading to really illustrate Choi Young-ae and her work.

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