User:Elksforest/LGBT rights in the United States/SirEze Peer Review

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Trans athletes in sports
Nineteen U.S. States have banned transgender people from participating in sports to their gender identity. These states include Texas, Arkansas, Florida, Alabama, Oklahoma, Kentucky, Mississippi, Tennessee, West Virginia, South Carolina, Utah, South Dakota, Montana, Iowa, Arizona, Idaho, Indiana, Louisiana, and Georgia. The passage of legislation against transgender youth has seen increases in calls to Trans Lifeline, a suicide crisis hotline run by and for transgender people.

The Human Rights Campaign has argued that these discriminatory laws are not about protecting women’s sports, but rather attempt to “undermine the existence of transgender people. Transgender advocates have noted that hormone replacement therapy and testosterone suppression reduces muscle mass and physical strength in transgender women, reducing the possibility of competitive advantage. Transgender inclusion in sports is supported by the Women’s Sports Foundation, the Women’s National Basketball Players Association (WNBPA), the National Women’s Law Center, and Athlete Ally, as well as United States Women’s National Soccer Team Captain Megan Rapinoe, tennis legend Billie Jean King, WNBA Minnesota Lynx coach Cheryl Reeve, and WNBA star Candace Parker.

The U.S. Department of Education has said transgender students are protected under Title IX.
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