User:Ellanapack/Widow inheritance/Mattkandel Peer Review

General info


 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ellanapack


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ellanapack/Widow_inheritance?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Widow inheritance

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead: I think the lead is a great place for you to add some more information, because right now the lead does a good job of giving an overview of the topic, but not why it's important or really how/where. You have so much new content and I think that you could easily summarize some of the key points into a little paragraph to throw into the lead to talk specifically about it's importance and its prevalence in Sub-Saharan Africa. Also, I know it's not really what you are researching, but if you could somehow dig up a little info on widow inheritance in Judaism and also Afghanistan, it could be nice to put that little bit into the lead as well to make it slightly more robust and well rounded.
 * Content: The content here is really well done. You've added a ton of new content on the African section of this article, and it will really aid in making the article more thorough and deep. Your research on this topic was clearly quite extensive, and I am super impressed by the amount of content you were able to create on what seems to be a relatively niche topic.
 * New Info: One place I think you could maybe expand with some more info is in the legislation paragraph. You mention how some nations have passed legislations to combat the issues association with widow inheritance, and I was left wondering which countries. Are they similar by region of Africa? Do they have the some government system? Are they completely random? I would be interested to know which countries in particular have passed laws specifically regarding widow inheritance. It would just make the article a little deeper to have those specifics.
 * Sources: The sources are the one thing about the article I am unsure about. You only have one referenced source at the bottom, yet I notice a lot of in-text citations. I think it is better to just link every source as a reference so that readers can go down to the bottom of the page and find the source to do some more extensive research if they choose. Based on the citations in the text it doesn't look like you have any shortage of sources, but I would just make sure to link those as a reference to make every piece of information as easily accessible as possible. The other thing is that without that I don't really know where your sources are from, so it could be a little harder to figure out the credibility of your sources.
 * Format: As a note, you can link pieces of info in your writing to other wikipedia articles. It might make it slightly easier for people to have access to information if once in a while you linked some specific terms to another wiki article. It is super easy and if you have any questions about how you do that just let me know!
 * Language: Your writing is really well done. You do a great job of using short, descriptive sentences to write about each topic. It makes it easier to follow, as well as skim if you are a reader looking for one specific piece on info.
 * Overall: I really like this topic and I enjoyed reading your work a lot. It is something that I have never heard of before, yet is clearly a major part of life for so many African nations. I was wondering if there have been any western groups combatting this, or advocating for it. Obviously it could be tough to write about because you want to avoid bias, but it could be worth throwing in something about cultural relativism and western perception of this practice (if that info exists). Overall you've done an amazing job and I can't wait to see the final product!