User:Elli207/Code-Switching/Empen004 Peer Review

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Elli207
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 * Code-switching:
 * Code-switching:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Your addition is very good. I like how you included specific examples that reference the grammar system. However, with this new addition, I think it would be helpful to address this in the article’s introduction section, as well. Consider adding the topics in your paragraph after the sentence in the original intro after it mentions “Code-switching may happen between sentences, sentence fragments, words, or individual morphemes (in synthetic languages).”

Additionally, when you add an introduction to the information you added, include a link or guide that will direct the reader to your specific addition for seamless navigation purposes. The lead can help the reader understand the article’s major sections through this brief description.

The lead also seems to lack framework for the article. I would read the introduction again and add or rearrange the topics that will be discussed so they are congruent with the order of the sections, including your new addition in the “Examples in conversation” section. I also think it is important for the introduction paragraph of the page to address the ideas of different cultures that use code-switching in the United States as it is vague in expressing the demographics of code switching. I think it should be established that code switching effects American population is very extreme ways. Overall, the lead is not very detailed, and I think your additions and modifications will help the organization and flow.

In looking at the paragraph that you added, I think it would benefit the overall flow of the Wiki article if you were to connect the topic you are discussing back to the introductory paragraph on code-switching. Consider adding something along the lines of “code switching is prominent in grammatical structuring of sentences, as different languages formulate sentences in ways that American English does not, and different races and ethnicities therefore use different structure as well…” This will help the reader understand where they are in the article as you introduce and elaborate on the topic of grammar in American English, while still referencing the Wiki article original essay structure.

Content:

Your content is definitely relevant to the article, so for this, I say well done! It is very easy to understand, and it helps the article get stronger in the logos aspects. Your content is also up to date and accurate. However, citations and evidence to support your claims are necessary. Maybe include a study on the use of specific terms and grammatical framework in the past ten years or so. Maybe include examples from African American authors and publications that use these grammar rules. Do not forget to cite your sources!

The content is very logical and explains the grammar of African American English exceptionally. However, there seems to be a lot of credentials lacking to back up your additions. There should be more content that describes the when and how these grammar structures are being used. The examples of publications would be very helpful here. As far as Wikipedia’s equity gaps, it is hard to tell if your addition deals with the equity gaps due to your lack of references. The topics are related to historically underrepresented populations and topics, but it lacks archives and research. Your sources are good for addressing these content gaps, but they are not referenced!

Tone and Balance:

Your tone and balance are good, especially because you are strictly explaining the rules and use of African American English. It is not biased toward any position. Your wording is also great; easily understood and accurate terms that really make your section strong. I think the example section is a great addition to this article but consider connecting the examples back to the ideas that were established in the lead paragraph. This would mean addressing the social effects of African American English in conversation. In this way, the misunderstandings, and negative effects of African American English in conversation is highly underrepresented. Your position is neutral, but I do think that connecting the examples back to the “social theories” will help represent the African American population. Connect the examples to things that were referenced earlier in the article, like “code-switching in the classroom” and “language transfer”.

Sources and References:

Your content does not seem to be backed up by any of your sources. Remember to read the sources and include the information that helped you formulate your addition. To cite the source, simply click “cite” and copy and paste the URL of the source into the box and push enter. This will also AUTOMATICALLY add the source to your reference list, and once you add the section to the Wiki page, it will automatically add the source to the official reference section at the bottom of the page as well, which is really nice.

As far as the sources you have chosen, they seem to be very good. They are current, neutral, and represent a diverse spectrum of authors. Including articles as well as entire books is also a good move, as books are highly scholarly and highly regarded. In terms of your actual sources, very well chosen. They just need to be cited in your paragraphs! When sourced correctly, double check to make sure the links work!

Organization:

Although your content is well-written, it does need some organization. First, I would modify the lead to the Wiki article to address the different sections that will be talked about, since it is not clear at all, and very vague. Then, in your section, I would reflect on the themes that are addressed throughout the page and connect them to your section about grammar. As far as your writing, it looks good! Everything is spelled correctly, and it is very easy to understand.

Overall Impressions:

Your content has improved the quality of this Wiki page on Code-Switching significantly. The strengths are visible in your writing and flow. It is very informational and logical. As soon as you add your sources and backup your claims with use of your references, it will be perfect.

Great job!