User:EllieB15/Villain/Seashellll218 Peer Review

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EllieB15
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I think the article does a great job laying out concrete ways animated villains play into stereotypes and referencing specific examples like Captain Hook or Ursula. I especially liked how you included the history behind Ursula's character design to show how there are real-life prejudices that influence the look and actions of animated villains. I also think the order and separation of the sections makes a lot of sense, especially since there are so many different kinds of stereotypes you are touching on. The most important thing that stands out to me is that the voice of the article doesn't feel entirely neutral, especially in the introductory section. I think you could shift some of the phrasing to sound less argumentative, possibly by changing sentences like "damages the development of perception of gender" to "could damage the development" or adding in a sentence about how these points about homophobia and sexism are topics of discussion in academic circles (or something like that).That way, you can incorporate the research without making it sound like you're pushing an argument and make sure the importance of the topic is still stated throughout the article without the undertones that you as the authors think one way or the other is right. You could also add more sentence starters that focus on crediting the authors who wrote the articles as a way to sound more neutral. On a side note, I think all of your sources sound really well-connected to the topic, reputable, and super interesting! One final thing I noticed in your article that could definitely be applied to my group is your use of linking throughout the sections. It really makes it feel like a part of a Wikipedia article and I think my group should follow your example.