User:Ellsbells1/Speech Disorders/Melanieeeedawson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ellsbells1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ellsbells1/Speech Disorders
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Speech disorder
 * Speech disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

This lead section is fantastic, it is very clear and presents straightforward facts. There is good structure, good use of sources, and overall is very solid. I personally have pretty limited knowledge on speech disorders, so I would maybe suggest adding some sentences about whether or not speech disorders are genetic or if there is anything that can genetically make one more susceptible to having a disorder. Also can one be developed overtime? Is it anything involving the brain? Just little things I personally don't know that may be useful to add. Other than these possible additions, this section is very good and I really cannot suggest a whole lot to change.

Social Effects

I love the example of the view of cleft palates in African countries, such an interesting perspective and great information to add. This section is very interesting and has great structure. I really like, "It has also been shown that adults tend to view individuals with stutters in more negative ways than those without them," and I think there could certainly be some elaboration here. I was thinking maybe in the direction of how those with speech disorders may be looked down upon and not taken as seriously in society. Do people with speech disorders have a more difficult time in academics? Do they have a harder time getting hired somewhere or something of the sort? I was thinking of things like that - if there is any information on stuff in that direction that could be great to add as it shows societal treatment. Very good information here, very useful edits, overall amazing work!