User:Elocin2/sandbox

Article chosen to improve by adding to it and editing

What I am planning to work on for this article and contribute to it: -Start of a history section -Adding of additional resources/citations
 * Tabor (instrument)- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tabor_(instrument)

Wikipedia Article Proposal- Choosing a Topic Three articles from Wikipedia that I am considering for my chosen article to update and add to are listed below along with a couple ideas on an area/s from each that I could improve upon:

-Start of a history section -Adding of additional resources/citations
 * Tabor (instrument)- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tabor_(instrument)

-History section is currently empty and needs information -Additional citations and references are needed
 * Cornett- []

-Start of a section on the characteristics of the sound of an augmented octave -Start of a section on the use/uses of these octaves in music composition -Additional resources needed
 * Augmented Octave- []

Article Evaluation

I reviewed the article on Renaissance music. While reading and evaluating this article I noted the following:


 * There are some sentences within the opening lead paragraph that may lack some flow in readability such as the second sentence of the first paragraph. Also, the last sentence of the fourth paragraph is confusing in the tense of the verbs used (starts out present tense and switches to past tense).
 * The first sentence of the "Overview" section might read better if the section in parentheses was made into its own sentence structure. There is also a comma missing between "the perfect fourth" and "the perfect fifth" in that sentence.
 * Under the heading "Genres" the first sentence of the third paragraph reads more like an opinion than a fact statement due to the wording "but one must be cautious about assuming" which is used. The word "probably" is also used in the same sentence and this wording does not denote fact.
 * Under the heading "Early period (1400–1470)" the first sentence of the fourth paragraph also sounds like an opinion instead of fact due to the wording sentence structure of "because" then this "must" be.
 * Under the heading "Late period (1530–1600)" the second sentence of the second paragraph uses the language "By far the most famous," and this sounds like an opinion interpretation versus a factual statement.
 * Under the heading of "Instruments" the woodwind instruments are labeled by their category as aerophones, but the other categories listed of organs, brass, strings, and percussion do not designate the categories they belong in such as the chordophones, idiophones, and membranophones.
 * There are several paragraphs and statements of fact within the article that do not have a citation following it. Some examples are paragraph 1,3, and 4 in the lead section (although there was mention on the talk page about specific statements of fact with the corresponding citations being placed in the body of the article and not in the lead section). However, there are multiple other spots throughout the article including the first paragraph under the heading "Genres" and several places in the three time period heading sections that are lacking citations.
 * On the Talk page for this article it is currently rated C-Class and is of interest to three different WikiProjects.