User:Elysetnguyen/Harmful algal blooms/Elysetnguyen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JehlianeC


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JehlianeC/Harmful algal bloom


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Harmful algal bloom

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * 1) There seems to be no lead in this article
 * 2) There’s no lead in this article and there’s no introductory sentence. I think adding one will definitely make your message more clear, and help readers gain an initial understanding of what the article is about.
 * 3) There’s no lead in this article and no brief description. Adding a brief description will help your article a lot. Maybe you could lead up to talking about the cyanobacteria instead of bringing it up right away, because people may not understand the information behind it.
 * 4) The article already has some information on cyanobacteria and elevated temperatures so I think you need to add more information and details so there’s differentiation from the existing facts and information.
 * 5) The lead needs to have more information in general.

Content


 * 1) Yes, the content added is relevant. The content added is about cyanobacteria which is what causes the harmful algal blooms. I think what you have is good, you should just add more details to it.
 * 2) Yes, the sources used so far seem to be up to date.
 * 3) There seems to be a lot of content missing. There’s already a lot of existing information on the Wikipedia page about cyanobacteria- what it is, what it's made of, the issues it causes- so maybe add some information that isn’t already in the article, like adding different facts about cyanobacteria that aren't on there.
 * 4) This topic doesn’t deal with equity gaps, but is about harmful algal blooms, which has been an issue that began even before human activities.

Tone and balance


 * 1) The content remains factual and neutral.
 * 2) There are no claims that seem biased, it just contains facts about the subject, but I would recommend adding more facts and information in general.
 * 3) I think the points are underrepresented. I understand the overall topic is about harmful algal blooms, and you are adding facts about cyanobacteria, but it’s only a couple of sentences, so I’m confused as to what viewpoints you are trying to make in general. I would suggest adding more to clarify your viewpoints.
 * 4) There’s no attempt to persuade the reader.

Sources and references


 * 1) The  content is backed up by the sources. The sources seem very reliable and have lots of information, so I would suggest taking more information from the sources and adding it to your article.
 * 2) The content reflects the sources, but lacks a lot of information that could be taken away from the sources.
 * 3) The sources are very thorough and provide lots of information.
 * 4) The sources are relevant and current.
 * 5) A couple of the sources are written by more than one author. I actually think this is better because it provides for different perspectives and details on the sources.
 * 6) The sources already used work well together.
 * 7) All the links work

Organization


 * 1) The content is factual and concise.
 * 2) There are no grammatical or spelling errors.
 * 3) I would say the content organization could be improved. There’s no brief introduction which makes it hard to read and understand what’s being talked about.

Images and media


 * 1) There are no images or media
 * 2) There are no captions
 * 3) There are no images
 * 4) There are no images

Overall impressions


 * 1) The content added doesn’t improve the overall quality of the article. I think there’s already a lot of information in the original article, and you have very little information that has already been introduced. Try adding more onto the existing information that will enhance it, not repeat it.
 * 2) The strength of the content added would be that the information is factual and seems reliable.
 * 3) The content added can be improved by just adding more content in general. Try adding an organized format to make it easier for readers to understand.