User:EmDom521/Fred Mhalu/Meticulousonion Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)
 * EmDom521
 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * User:EmDom521/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Yes (new page)
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Yes
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Yes, the information on his current work
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * Nice and concise

Lead evaluation
I think your lead is in a very good place, just needs a bit of copy editing and it's good.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Yes, to the best of my knowledge
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * No

Content evaluation
You have done great work to locate and compile information on the subject. Great work!

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * No

Tone and balance evaluation
The facts presented in the article are not trying to persuade a reader toward one viewpoint or another. It is nicely balanced and does a great job presenting information on the subject.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * From what I was able to see briefly online, yes
 * Are the sources current?
 * Yes
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes

Sources and references evaluation
Sources look good and the links within the article are great!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Mostly. there were a few places where sentences could be simplified a little to make them clearer.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * Yes, if possible it may help to have subheadings within the career section.

Organization evaluation
Before moving this over to Wiki, it would be worth giving it a read through from start to finish as if you didn't know anything about the subject.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
If you could find some images of the university or something like that it could be a bit more appealing to a reader.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * Yes
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * From a historical perspective, it is great.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Infobox may be helpful to gather biographical information in a quick glance.(there's a template under the insert menu)
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * Yes, many times.

New Article Evaluation
It is very solid first entry for an article.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
You did great work finding resources to support this biography. The writing is excellent and just needs some formatting upgrades and a proof for clarity to be ready to publish.