User:Ema1207/Employment discrimination/Bonniedog11 Peer Review

General info
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 * ema1207


 * User:Ema1207/Employment discrimination :
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great job! Overall, the information added is relevant and enhances the article. There are a few changes that I would recommend. First of all, this sentence, "The lack of racial diversity in schools is troubling, especially in schools where there is a bigger population of African-American students who are unable to see teachers of the same race in their learning environment", is correct, but it uses an opinion. Information added to Wikipedia needs to be neutral, which this sentence is not. Also, this sentence "This persists through all levels of experience in the field" seems like it should be at either the beginning or the end of the paragraph since the rest of it is only talking about early childhood education.