User:Emarsh375/Unemployment in the United States/Myspecialusername Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emarsh375


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Emarsh375/Unemployment in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Unemployment in the United States
 * Unemployment in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
'''Great job, Emily! I think this is a great start to your draft. The following is my peer review for your article. Let me know if you have any questions!'''

Just wondering, were you going to add to the section on women or keep it the "Effects of COVID-19 on increasing unemployment in 2020"?

Gender


 * Women
 * Add stats here about women from Ruth Lister, Strader

I think the following sentence could be split into two sentences:

Among married couples, women are more likely to provide childcare than men even when they both work full time, so daycare closures disproportionately affect mothers (11-12)

For ex: "Daycare closures disproportionately affected mothers (citation). Among married couples, women are more likely to provide childcare than men even when they both work full time (citation)."

I also think this sentence can be split into two:

While most parents have struggled during COVID-19 (I think you can take this part of the sentence out), single mothers are most negatively impacted because women are more likely to have less flexible jobs and single mother households make up 21% of households in the United States, compared to 4% of single father households (12)

For ex: "Single mothers are most negatively impacted by unemployment during the COVID-19 pandemic because women are more likely to have less flexible jobs (citation). Single mother households make up 21% of households in the United States, compared to 4% of single father households (citation)."

'''The added content under "Effects of COVID-19 on increasing unemployment in 2020" is relevant to the class and written in a neutral tone without any biases. It is important information that contributes and strengthens this section. The layout of the content is also well-organized. The breakdown of the sections make it concise, clear, and easy to read. One thing you could add to enhance the content is an intersectional lens. For example, I think information on race, sexuality, or disability would strengthen the equity gap in the content. Also, I would add citations after the sentences (let me know if you have any questions on how to add a citation in Wikipedia). Another thing, I would not use the, "The Impact of COVID-19 on Gender Equality" by Alan et. al https://www.nber.org/papers/w26947 because the paper is still a work in progress. It has not been peer-reviewed yet. The piece by Crabtree, "In U.S., Depression Rates Higher for Long-Term Unemployed," is also a tricky one. I would ask Dr. Strader or someone else in the class, but I think there are stronger sources out there. I think it is safest to stick to textbooks or peer-reviewed publications.'''

I found this source that you might be able to use for this section, "Parenting during COVID-19 :A study of parents experience across gender and income levels" https://www-proquest-com.proxygw.wrlc.org/docview/2554543743?pq-origsite=primo 

'''The other sources you have included are good choices. If you decide to look into other sources, I think Wikipedia suggests more recent/current publications, with a diverse spectrum of authors, and written by historically marginalized voices. Overall, the content adds to the quality of not only the section on "Effects of COVID-19 on increasing unemployment in 2020," but the entire article on "Unemployment in the United States" because it fills in a significant gendered gap with an overview of the current literature surrounding this topic.'''