User:Emelydd/Occipital gyri/Beleneo Peer Review

Peer review for Occipital gyri
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * This article does not have a username.
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Occipital gyri

Lead
Lead evaluation:


 * The Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by my peers. In fact the last edit was made on the 16th of October.
 * The Lead has an introductory sentence that is pretty clear what the occipital gyri in the most basic way.
 * There is only one small paragraph written for this article, therefore the whole paragraph is brief.
 * The lead is moderate because there isn't much concept to talk about.
 * The Lead is very short and does not consist of a lot of detail.

Content
Content evaluation:


 * All of the content added to the page is very much relevant to the topic.
 * The content is up-to-date even though there's hardly any information.
 * There is a lot more information that needs to be added to this article.

Tone and Balance
Tone and balance evaluation:


 * The content does not include personal beliefs and only used facts, therefore the information is neural
 * There isn't much information to critique whether the information is biased in any order. Based off what is written, it does not reflect ay bias.
 * It seems like there is only one viewpoint.
 * The information is clear, however there isn't enough to persuade the reader in fully understanding and believing what the occipital gyrus is.

Sources and References
Sources and references evaluation:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Organization
Organization evaluation:


 * There are some technical words that are not defined which makes the content a bit confusing to understand, especially if the reader has no idea what an occipital gyri is.
 * no grammatical or spelling errors.
 * It is well-organized even though it lacks a lot of information.

Images and Media
Images evaluation:


 * The article includes 2 images which clearly show the region the paper talks about.


 * Well captioned images.
 * legal pictures were used.
 * Yes, the images are clear and precise.

For New Articles Only
Evaluation


 * The article is supported by 2 scientific articles and an org website.
 * There are only 3 sources listed. More reliable sources need to be added to this article because there is hardly any information written.
 * This article has a good amount of links in relation to the small paragraph written for this topic.

Overall impressions
Impressions of the article:


 * The content added to the article is good for an initial understanding of the occipital gyri, however there is no analysis.
 * The content is clear and to the point of a Lead paragraph. What are the strengths of the content added?
 * Much more research can be done on this topic. The content published by the author is a good start to a successful wikipedia page on the occipital gyri. Information such as comparing and contrasting scientific studies, evaluating pros and cons, and inserting more pictures would make this article much better. This would also create space for more things to be talked about.