User:Emeraldh01/Sea turtle migration/Nansimonious Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emeraldh01


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emeraldh01/Sea_turtle_migration?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sea turtle migration

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Your additions seem necessary and will improve the article content and organization. In general, I think there are a number of great points in your draft, but there are also areas that could use improvement, such as citing sources more frequently, some elaboration, and making sure any statements are attributed to a research paper. Some examples below! Overall, I think the organization of the pre-existing page could use some work to make it flow and keep the ideas separate. Adding images might help as well.

Could you elaborate on this: "Temperature plays a major affect on both metabolic and physiological process of the turtle"? Also, on VO2?Just on a quick read, this sentence sounds a little bit like it might be an opinion rather than from a body of research- could you back it up or rephrase to attribute it to its source? "It can be concluded that the migrations done by the sea turtles are helpful in regulating temperatures, which overall increases their aerobic metabolic activity." For example, you could write, "The research team concluded that..."

Under "Navigation methods," could you take a look at this sentence: "There are several hypotheses including astronomical cues and the Earth's magnetic field"? I think clarifying what these hypotheses are and linking to the relevant studies would be extremely beneficial. Further explanation on what bicoordinate mapping is and geoprinting is would be helpful, or links to their own pages.

So interesting! I love the topic.