User:Emily De Boer/Persimmon Blackbridge/Carbyb Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emily de Boer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Emily de Boer/Persimmon Blackbridge


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Persimmon Blackbridge

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hey Emily! This is a really interesting topic, it's great that you're updating this article to focus more on disability in the arts in relation to Persimmon Blackbridge. I'm excited to read your sections "Disability in the arts" and "Mental health". As for feedback, I would add citations to your statements and maybe some links to other Wikipedia articles (for ex: gender constructs, Tangled Art Gallery, her awards etc.) A small nitpick would be to pay attention to capitalizing the first letter of each sentence as well. Can't wait to see where you take this!