User:Emilycs4970/National Security Act of 1947/Aasaro4970 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emilycs4970's Wikipedia edits.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emilycs4970/National_Security_Act_of_1947?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * National Security Act of 1947

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that what you added was needed to show how the understanding of what the bill does in that before it there was a division between the War Department and the Navy. I think that it might be good to create background/history information sections that explain what had led up to the bill to be created but then also have a legislative background (in this section it would be good to keep what the current section but to add more details like different arguments or how outside organizations had impacted the bill’s process). While looking at your act’s Wikipedia page it might be a good idea to also add what the legislation did and caused, so its legacy. After you update these sections you should be able to easily incorporate your five to ten sources in the Wikipedia page.

Response to peer review
Hey Alexis! Thanks for reviewing my draft! Your advice about how a legislative background section with more details is a great idea. I'll definitely look at and figure out a way to incorporate this, especially in regards the outside organizations' impact on the bill's process! Based on your review, I think a section that displays the different arguments and the outside organizations (and their viewpoints, if they had any) would be a useful subsection. Thank you again! -- Emily S.