User:Emilycs4970/National Security Act of 1947/Trevormyrvold Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Emilycs4970)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Emilycs4970/National Security Act of 1947
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * National Security Act of 1947
 * National Security Act of 1947

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello Emily,

- Great start with your Draft so far, your (titles, sub-titles, quotes, evaluation, history and references) are all up to par.

- Everything is relevant from what I've seen, unfortunately it looks like the original wiki page is pretty short, but I guess that gives you the freedom to add whatever you want basically.

- Good job staying on topic and keeping your claims on topic with the original text.

- The viewpoints within your draft are not overrepresented or underrepresented, although I think there can be a little bit more information outside of the historical category.

- The citations are so far really good and they all work (in-text) the sources are also very solid, just a few more and you will have a lot of additional info to add to your page!

- Good references so far, they all seem to check out and provide neutral information that is not bias or unbias, simply historical so far.

- Maybe a few more small categories other than history, such as adding to military or the introduction, maybe add a background or some information about the law and possibly even some fun facts that readers could find out about this law that they didn't know before. Other than that, good job so far!

Response to peer review
Hey Trevor! Thank you so much for reviewing my draft! Your advice about adding more categories is great, and I really like the idea of having some fun facts in there. Based on your overall review, I think I'm going to find some more sources, since you're right that it would probably give me even more additional info to add. Adding to the introduction has seemed super intimidating but you're right in that it would be a good addition to make. Thank you so much again for your review!

-- Emily S.