User:Emilyfisher0/Natural Disaster/TheAlexRodriguez Peer Review

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General info

 * Emilyfishero
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Emilyfisher0/sandbox

Lead
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 * The lead is very clear for the section you plan to add called, ""Disproportionate risk". I think the information you're adding about the impact NGOs have on local politics, etc (on your other section of political consequences) with their donation needs to be flushed out. I recommend combining the two sentences like " The role of donors and NGOs in disaster relief can produce changes in the political economies of the countries receiving such foreign aid in post-disaster efforts as those NGOs increase their market and political power."
 * I also like how I understood the article of natural disaster even before I actually read the article itself. Your lead is strong and to the point (aside from your political consequence).

Content
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 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? The content is really relevant and I appreciate the scholarship adding the experiences of low-income communities. I would suggest even adding an example of what happened to low-income communities during a natural disaster. An example I can think on the top of my head is the NOLA Hurricane Katrina. I remember in my GPP 115 class we spoke about it and the term "resilience" and how that term goes hand in hand with the lack of action and support given to these low-income communities.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? The content is up to date. I would even suggest adding some information on coronavirus and how this can be seen as a natural disaster and affects low-income communities worse.

Tone and Balance
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 * Is the content added neutral? I would suggest editing some words or phrases, such as "to support the weak" and "Not only do lower income individuals within lower income countries tend to live in geographically unsafe locations" as they might seem as belittling and offensive to some populations. However, your information that you provided is not bias (atleast to me) and does not seem to swing me another way. I would urge that you look at the way you present it and not make it seem like an email, especially with words such as "although", etc.

Sources and References
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 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? The sources, although not the most recent, are scholarly and seem to provide a lot of enrichment.

Organization
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 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? The content is very well presented and easy to read. Good job!

Overall impressions
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 * How can the content added be improved? Add more details and actual examples of examples when low-income communities were hit by a natural disaster and when an NGO gained power through their gift aid and contributions.