User:Emilyg01/Dunbar-Hunter Expedition of 1804-1805/JosephineHriscu Peer Review

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Emily G


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 * User:Emilyg01/Dunbar-Hunter Expedition of 1804-1805


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This article has a lot of good information! I really liked how concise your introductory description was, and would recommend adding just a little more specific information about findings from the expedition as well as emphasizing importance. All of your sections are well written, with only one or two places with awkward phrasing. Adding more specific information in the Discoveries section would add more depth to the article, and finding a few more sources would further strengthen the credibility.