User:Emilyhg.371/2019 Visayas earthquake/Huzmir1014 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emilyhg


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emilyhg.371/2019_Visayas_earthquake?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 2019 Eastern Samar earthquake

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft is very well developed, including 3 new subsections the group wishes to add to the article as well as 5 sources. Firstly, the group has created three well developed paragraphs that follow new themes that they have outlined; geography, first hand accounts, and damages. All three of these themes are new and not present in the article as well as article ready, being fully sourced, grammatically correct, and properly formatted. A minor criticism is that the 5 sources are not completely credible, including sources from CNN and "volcanodiscovery.com". Though these are fine for preliminary information I would suggest finding more credible and reliable sourcing for further additions, such as from peer reviewed journals or peer reviewed documents. A second very minor change I would suggest is finding away to organize the three subheading topics they have into one larger heading to better fit into the article formatting wise. At this point the group is very well off and has concrete and article ready changes with many references. This group is set and head of the game and I'm excited to see what they come up with.

Darshil Talati
Thank you for your feedback. I agree that some of the sources are not the most credible. It's just difficult to find sources that meet Wikipedia's strict criteria while still having enough information to make a significant contribution to the article. We may get rid of the first-hand account section and incorporate it into the other sections but we're probably gonna keep the geography and damages section separate because that seems to be common among featured articles about earthquakes.