User:Emilyngu3/Mighty-O Donuts/Kfoltz2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emilyngu3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emilyngu3/Mighty-O_Donuts?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mighty-O Donuts
 * Mighty-O Donuts

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! Great article; you definitely polished this up! I have a couple of suggestions listed below. I hope this helps!

- Make sure to not to have a new line for each sentence so each section looks like one (or more) cohesive paragraph(s).

- In the founding section, I recommend adding more information about how the business started and/or more information about the person who started the business (what are their values, goals, purpose, etc).

- If there are any other recognitions, I would add a couple more and/or add more details to the recognitions already.

- I would try to find more information on things the company has done and/or accomplished recently since some of the stronger parts of the article are about things that happened over 10 years ago.

- It might be beneficial to add pictures (besides the logo) so people can see what it looks like on the inside! Since it is local, you could also include a map of the main location.

- The introduction talks about how it's environmentally friendly. I would elaborate on what steps they are taking to be environmentally friendly!

- What are some of the organizations that they donate to? I don't think you need to include all of them, but if you can find a couple (maybe three) examples of where they donate, people might be more interested in going there since it does to a good cause (that they might support).

- When I clicked on the references, it looks like the second and third links didn't work. Make sure to double-check that the links were copied and pasted correctly!

- Another note about references: If you can find more sources, this would be more of a reliable source. Since it's a small chain, there might not be a lot of articles to reference. If this is the case, you should still be okay!

- Just wanted to note - you did a great job embedding citations into your work and including links thought the article!

- I made a couple minor grammatical corrections and deleted some of the spaces (as I talked about above).