User:Emkajo0216/Clothing swap/Juliettelm Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emkajo0216


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Emkajo0216/Clothing swap


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Clothing swap

Evaluate the drafted changes
Great job with this article! I think the lead was well written and describes what a clothing swap is well written and concise. I edited part of the article for sentence restructuring: "Clothing swaps are considered an excellent way to refill one's wardrobe and are considered an act of environmentalism.” I also switched out the word “good” to “excellent”.  I think you found some great information that ties into swap meets and summed-up your sources well. The writing tone you used is encyclopedic and neutral.  I like how you included the sentence “Throughout the period of clothing swaps, participants tend to be women”, maybe consider adding more demographics or statistics like this into the article. I also made grammatical changes and fixed some spelling errors throughout the article.

Suggested edits:


 * “The process has two main features. The first is the process of obtaining clothes then, the swap being facilitated. These occur in person as well as via the Internet; clothing swaps have adapted as society continually changes.” - consider rewording this sentence to something like “The process of swapping clothes is obtaining clothes and then organizing the swap meet”.
 * Maybe consider adding images of clothing swaps to the article that would align with Wikipedia’s copyright regulations.
 * To make sure your article is discoverable, try linking words in your article to other Wikipedia articles.
 * I noticed your sources are relatively up to date, however, maybe including some more sources from 2019 or later would be good.  I found this just doing a quick google search: https://theecologist.org/2020/jan/13/rise-community-fashion-swaps (from 2020).

Looking forward to seeing the final article come to life!