User:Emmaasheaa/sandbox

= Article Evaluation = The first thing that is wrong with the article, is that there is nothing there. It is a stub. Only contains a definition. It does a good job already by allowing to redirect to the other meaning of parasitic loss (machinery). The definition needs a citation. When looking up parasitic loss, just goes right to "parasitism".... questions to be asked... Are those the same thing? Why would somebody start an article about parasitic loss when a great one on parasitism is already made? So maybe they aren't the same? Is parasitic loss in parasitism? Does parasitic loss even need a whole article on it? or is this only a definition stating what parasitic loss is? I think it really is just a definition about when a parasite consumes from a host the LOSS could be beneficial or not.

Maybe you can add some things about what would happen in the loss was beneficial? also not beneficial. The big picture. Possibly state the most common ways it could go. EX: "when most parasites consume from the host, the outcome that is most likely is non beneficial...." State facts n why, how, etc.

Week 3
Added to the article "Primary Producers". Didn't want to add to parasitic loss because it was hard to find info on it as it was also difficult to find an article to add info to as well. Luckily Primary producers was not that tough. Added some sentences, with citations. and a heading.

Week 4
I am working on the article "Primary Producers" by myself. I know I have 3 assigned articles to me but they need to be romped because this is the one that will require my full attention.

I can add a heading to this article about photosynthesis, something else I can add is if there is anything that can go wrong to/with primary producers, also if there are any benefits with them as well. Also, as I was reading the article last week, I wanted to organize the examples of primary producers as think there wasn't a heading for it, and maybe put hem into there little sections. (water, land, etc.)

Week 5
"Lead"

Primary producers are any plant thats green, or any microorganism/organism that can convert light energy or chemical energy into organic matter. (Refrase)(http://www.dictionary.com/browse/primary-producer)(In almost all cases these are photosynthetically active organisms (plants, cyanobacteria, protists and a number of other unicellular organisms; see article on photosynthesis). They make usable energy for themselves, and other organisms by taking energy from non living sources.  However, there are examples of archaea and bacteria(unicellular organisms) that produce biomass from the oxidation of inorganic chemical compounds (chemoautotrophs) in hydrothermal vents in the deep ocean. These organisms are considered to exist at the lowest trophic level.) (Already in article) There are many other types of examples of primary producers. Also, chemosynthesis plays an important role in primary producer as well. These organisms are the reasons why earth is sustainable to this day.

"Missing"

Many examples of primary producers are missing, and HOW these organisms are photosynthetically active. ANYTHING that has todo with chemosynthesis is missing, as well as the importance of primary producers.

Article with MY EDITS (in bold)
PRIMARY PRODUCERS

Primary producers take energy from other organisms and make it energy that is used. In almost all cases these are photosynthetically active organisms (plants, cyanobacteria, protists and a number of other unicellular organisms; see article on photosynthesis). They make usable energy for themselves, and other organisms by taking energy from nonliving sources. [1] However, there are examples of archaea and bacteria(unicellular organisms) that produce biomass from the oxidation of inorganic chemical compounds (chemoautotrophs) in hydrothermal vents in the deep ocean. These organisms are considered to exist at the lowest trophic level.[2] '''There are many other types of examples of primary producers. Also, chemosynthesis plays an important role in being a primary producer as well. These organisms are the reasons why earth is sustainable to this day.'''

EXAMPLES

There are many different types of primary producers in the earths ecosystem at different states. Fungi and other organisms that gain their biomass from oxidizing organic materials are called decomposers and are not primary producers. However, lichens located in tundra climates are an exceptional example of a primary producer that, by mutualistic symbiosis, combine photosynthesis by algae (or additionally nitrogen fixation by cyanobacteria) with the protection of a decomposer fungus. Also, plant like primary producers (trees, algae) use the sun as a form of energy and put it into the air for other organisms. There are of course h20 primary producers, including a form of bacteria, and phytoplankton. As there are many examples of primary producers, two dominant types are coral and one of the many types of brown algae, kelp.

 PHOTOSYNTHESIS 

'''Gross Primary Production occurs by photosynthesis. This is also a main way that primary producers take energy and produce/release it somewhere else. Plants, coral, bacteria, and algae are four types that do this. Bacteria, though, is a more recent find in the process of photosynthesis with primary producers as they were just discovered in the soil. During photosynthesis, primary producers take energy (from the sun) and produce it into energy, sugar, and oxygen. PP's also need energy to convert this energy elsewhere, so they get it from nutrients, aka their "food". For example a type of nutrient would be nitrogen.'''

Peer Review
Another student and I were working on the same article as each other without even noticing and got assigned to work on it together. We also got assigned to give each other a peer review of what they have drafted so far. The following is what I wrote of my partners talk page:

First, the article you chose is already a great pick because we both chose the same one - as you already know!

You have a great list of citations so far! Looking at your draft versus mine, I like how we edited different sections of the article so maybe we can get together at one point over email, or in the ss center and critique each section and maybe add to them? Thank you for the idea of a reference box, as I can see on your sandbox page it makes it a lot more clear on where you got your information from in those certain sections. Maybe we can find a way to reduce the use of commas? I'm not saying theres anything wrong with commas but maybe theres easier ways to structure the sentences? I could be wrong. We can definitaly add to the importance of primary producers but you absolutely got a great start on it! Sort of like the building blocks of the section. Maybe after the importance section we can add one about (if there is any) the disadvantages of primary producers, or if anything can go wrong with them. Great primary production draft, very good speech, much wikipedian accent. very nice.

Also in your reference table i see there are multiples of citations. Are they the same link or different? if the same maybe you can remove them from the box and just click duplicate when adding the same citation. :)

Great work and great start!!!!

Response to Peer Review
He states I had typo errors so I went through and fixed those. He also said to make a Reference list and maybe state why I chose those references. I only have two references and I tried to make a list but I don't know how to put "References" at the top like he has. As in making a heading for the list. The reason I chose these references were because they were the only two places I could really find some good information on Primary Producers. At least information that really gave details that were not really in the article.

Totally off record, but I also want to know how to make my headings their own in the box above everything, instead of 1, 1.2, 1.3 ... etc

THE END
Well, today was the last day of editing our articles. I added all the work I wished to add (as seen in my edits above). I learned a lot about primary producers and it was a very cool experience to be able to add to a wiki article. (Even though I was always told to never use it as a source for my information) I added links to it, more information, revised paragraphs, pretty sure my partner added a very cool picture. ETC