User:Emmaschroder/School segregation in the United States/Lreese92 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emma Schroder


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Emmaschroder/School segregation in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * School segregation in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
1.How much scholarly evidence did the group use on the page?

Did they include at least three in-text citations? Yes.

What was the quality of the references? There are a good variety of references and many are referred to within the article.

Were summaries from the reference appropriate? (no plagiarism!) I am wondering if there should be a citation after the third sentence in the “School Segregation” section? Also, there is a typo at the end of this sentence, which should be a comma instead of a period. I like how you added so many links to other article so that people could continue to learn as they were working through your article. I was wondering if you could add a little more information to the “New Deal era” section? I liked how you started with the background, but was hoping for a little bit more information.

2.How effectively did the group incorporate visuals into the page?

I liked the two images you used and found that they added to the overall information of the article. One suggestion I have is maybe moving the picture where you mention Jim Crow Laws to the “School segregation” section where Jim Crow Laws are mentioned.

3.How well written was the page?

There are some minor grammatical errors that I noticed, which mostly happen when you’re using the conjunction “which.” Commas need to be added in these places. Other than that, I think it is very easy for the public to navigate and comprehend.