User:Emmaschroder/School segregation in the United States/PMMorin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emmaschroder


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emmaschroder/School_segregation_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * School segregation in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
1.How much scholarly evidence did the group use on the page?

Emma was able to add a lot of evidence to her page. She included many in-text citations that I felt added substance and will enhance the article. All the references seemed to be reliable and unbiased. I did not see any plagiarism. However, I wonder if there would be a different phrase to replace struck down in this sentence. This phrase was used in the source. Also, should constitutional be unconstitutional?

But in 1883, the Supreme Court struck down the Civil Rights Act of 1875, finding that discrimination by individuals or private businesses is constitutional.

2.How effectively did the group incorporate visuals into the page?

Emma added two great images that I feel improved the article. I particularly liked the drinking fountain picture. I feel that this picture is a visual representation of segregation which adds to the impact of the article. Both images were clear and easy to see.

3.How well written was the page?

The grammar, punctuation and sentence structure look good to me. The article was easy to read and any words that may not be common words for the public were explained (e.g. white flight).

I believe that the information Emma added was a great contribution to the article.