User:Emmazeko/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Food Justice Movement

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose this article because it relates to the research I've done into the field of food insecurity and the various approaches to solve it. Also, Wikipedia has a warning on this article that it is written in an argumentative or personal style and needs to be rewritten in a neutral tone, so there's definitely work to be done on it. There are also many subheadings that I have done research on such as food deserts, structural inequalities, food sovereignty, and SNAP.

Evaluate the article
Just based on the talk page of this article, there's a lot of work to be done. Many editors have commented that it is poorly written and feels thrown together. Also, the claim that there is a lack of diverse perspectives within the movement isn't backed by strong sources and doesn't come across as a fact, but rather an opinion. The style also feels like an essay due to word choice, transitions, etc.

One section I'll definitely edit is the race and the movement section. Currently it is one long quote with no paraphrasing. I plan to paraphrase this quote and also to expand on this section since race is at the center of the movement. The section on health issues connected to diet also is in need of citations/ more neutral language.

A weakness of this article is that many different people have edited this article in a way that has made it not feel cohesive, I think many students have worked on this page for class. This article is currently class C and is rated as low importance. It's part of the WikiProject Food and Drink.

I also plan on adding a section to consequences/ unintended impacts of the movement where I can talk about green gentrification. I think there are already a good amount of subheadings, but they could maybe be rearranged to have a better flow.