User:Emmazeko/Food Justice Movement/Wombatsaregreat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emmazeko


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Emmazeko/Food_Justice_Movement?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Food Justice Movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your paraphrasing is all very neat, concise, and clears up a lot in the article. I really like your additions and possible additions in addition to all the working notes you have on this, especially centered around race and the global struggle for food sovereignty. Excited to see how you translate your NTH to Wikipedia voice, and would love to see more elaboration on what radical restructuring of the food system food sovereignty brings up along with citations. Your limitations of the movement section adds a lot to this article and makes it more balanced, and it would be great to have sentences such as "However, these organizations need money to have a strong impact and face the challenge of finding a balance between radicalism and realistic change." into more Wikipedia voice. Great job!