User:Emmazeko/Hunger in the United States/Lin.jaide Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Emmazeko


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Emmazeko/Hunger in the United States
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hunger in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Content
Overall the planned edits are well-integrated into the overall messaging and intent of the article's content and sections — the edits to the Food Justice section can focus more strongly on the intersectionality of racial discrimination with issues of food insecurity and poverty, while also potentially highlighting historical examples or markers of this pattern. In addition, the edits to the "Food Desert" section can focus on more localized examples food deserts and how this plays a role in determining the diet, nutrition, and intake of individuals in certain marginalized communities.

While the addition to the "Private sector hunger relief" section highlights several important considerations to the food aid debate (reliance on surplus food and misallocation/unequal distribution of resources across communities), many of these themes can still be further contextualized with examples or historical events to reinforce the statements.

Tone and Balance
The article edits do a great job of maintaining an encyclopedic tone and citing specific examples of regulatory policies and federal laws on the matter of food aid and food insecurity (ex. Bill Emerson Good Samaritan Food Donation Act) as well as highlighting specific research teams and task forces working on the assessment of food insecurity across the United States. My only recommendation for this section would be working on conciseness, cutting down potentially repetitive phrasing or trimming down on sentences that tread closely to becoming run-on.

Sources and References
The article edits employ a relatively diverse set of sources and references (university research projects, opinion pieces from research groups, etc.) and are appropriately cited.

Organization
The edits are well-organized, although including more specificity in the changes is needed before moving on to assessing overall structure and flow.

Overall Impressions
Overall, I thought that the additions are well thought out and integrate important aspects from NTH, etc. into contextualizing the issue of hunger in the United States. Awesome job on these draft edits! :)