User:Emsager190/sandbox

= Practice Sandbox: =

Article Evaluation
=== Article that I chose to evaluate: "Visual Communication" === Everything in the article seems to be relevant to the ideas of visual communication, although the sentence structure and wording is a little hard to understand. Everything appears neutral and factual. The citations throughout the text lead me to the bottom of the page titled "References" where the author's name and piece cited are available (I'm not sure if that is how it should work, but the citations seem legitimate). The structure of the actual article definitely needs a lot of work. The intro to Visual Communication is confusing and short, but the author later defines it more clearly under the section titled "Overview". I think that this definition should be in the intro at the top of the page. I also think there is a more efficient way to organize the entire article, because it does seem to be all over the place. As for the Talk Page, I had a hard time understanding where the author's comments were. At the bottom of the page there is a comment from the author titled "For those with some awareness of phylogenetics or clade presentations", where the author links another Wikipedia page for users to state their opinions on their piece. When I click on the link, I am taken to page where the original author and another user argue (including many typos such as using the incorrect "they're" and other simple grammatical errors) and basically erase all their credibility as Wikipedia editors. The arguments are unprofessional and attack each other personally as editors. When I click on the username of the original author, there is a long letter in bold stating that they are leaving Wikipedia.

Wikipedia Post (Old Topic)
===Why I chose this article: "Indigenous Decolonization" :=== It's a start-class article, and there is a lot of room for improvement. I plan on adding different cultures to the piece, and including a more thorough definition on what decolonization is. The article's content is relevant, it is just lacking in providing multiple details and examples. It is written neutrally and it does claim to have proper citations.

=== What I want to add to this article: "Indigenous Decolonization" : === I want to add Native American decolonization to the article. I also want to talk about the internalization of decolonization.

Possible Works Cited: Articles or Pieces I can use:


 * “My Critical Awakening: A Process of Struggles and Decolonizing Hope” by Daniel Henhawk

Wikipedia Post (New Topic)
=== Why I chose this article: "Hunger (memoir)" : ===

This is also a start-class article. It is incredibly short and underdeveloped. I plan to add some of my own research I have done for my research log regarding eating disorders tied into sexual trauma and its relevance to Roxane Gay's memoir Hunger. The original article's content is relevant in a brief summary of the novel, using outside sources and the actual memoir itself in order to back up claims made. The tone is neutral and the citations check out.

=== What I want to add to this article: "Hunger (memoir)" : === I want to add more about sexual trauma specifically, and how it is correlated with eating disorders. This is very prevalent in Roxane Gay's memoir Hunger: I think it would be best to cite the memoir directly, because the page is lacking so much in just general information about Roxane Gay's Hunger. Even though I am citing Hunger directly, I still would like to add some possible sources that may be helpful to the Wikipedia article "Hunger (memoir)" just in case I want to add them:

Possible Works Cited: Articles or Pieces I can use:


 * “‘A Way Outa No Way’: Eating Problems among African-American, Latina, and White Women" by Becky Wangsgaard

Content
From the Wikipedia article: "Hunger (memoir)" : " Gay gained weight in the wake of her trauma, as both a means of comfort and of protecting herself from the world, and describes the book as being about "living in the world when you are three or four hundred pounds overweight, when you are not obese or morbidly obese but super morbidly obese."" 

My own post: Gay explains that this desire for protection through binge eating began as a coping mechanism in order to become physically larger and "repulsive" to men. By avoiding the male gaze, Gay as a child pursued her own safety from further sexual assault.