User:En 2056/Pastrana Tapestries/Moozicle Peer Review

General info
Emma- (En 2056)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:En%202056/Pastrana_Tapestries?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pastrana Tapestries

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Emma! Here is my peer review for you!

Lead

The opening to the article has been changed to be organized, versus before where it had no header. This opening line gives important but summarized context of what the article is going to be about.

Content

The section after the opener has been moved from the original article to add more historical context, which gives readers a lot more detail aout the tapestries. I like the choice to add hyperlinks to prominent figures and places, it brings a nice sense of interaction for readers and allows them to be able to click these links and understand the context. This move is also not overused, only important terms have these links and the readers are not overflooded with these blue links. The headers help lead readers and keep them organized while looking over the article, whereas in the previous, there were little to no headers. There are some slight wording issues, in the second paragraph, some commas and sentence breakers may be needed. Looking at the original article, it seems most of the issues are previous editors, just make sure to go over their work to straighten it out a bit. My favorite section of the editing has to be where you organized the pictures of the tapestries and gave them descriptions. These descriptions add a lot of important detail about each of the tapestries that the current article lacks. I noticed there is a lot of historical context surrounding the tapestries in this article. If possible it would be very useful to add some information about them now, perhaps, where are they located, what is the current state of their restoration, etc. Also, is there more information on the manufacturing of these tapestries, how they were made, what material, etc.

Tone

The wording is very original and is not biased to lead readers in any certain direction. The information does not seem to be plagiarized, but a good thing to fix could be changing a few usages of “they” and “it” to be more specific.

Sources

There is great use of citation with the new edits, but there appears to be some lacking ones with the current page. The sources used seem very credible, there is a lot of information from textbooks and museum websites. The state of your editing is great, and there is a lot of new and useful information that is well cited and worded. It would be great to add a few new sources! Is there any museums that possibly had the tapestries on display that could provide some new content, some books from scholars who have studied them, etc.

~Daisy (moozicle)