User:Enabulei/Firefly squid/Realefu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Enabulei/Firefly squid


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Enabulei/Firefly_squid?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template#Current_Article
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Firefly squid

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The edits were confusing to navigate and difficult determine where the information you found would be added into the original article. The edits should be integrated or meshed into the paragraphs of the actual article rather than having the two separate and then bolded to indicate what was changed/ added. It was difficult to pick out what parts of the article were added versus what was originally there. The research and implications in the Mating section were interesting to read but contains too much information for the original article; make this part more concise. Only some parts of the research and background should be added, such the findings and conclusion of the research. The tone of the edits are neutral and well balanced. The edits are grammatically correct.The level of scientific language is fine, just make sure you don't use too much jargon when talking about the research.