User:Enajedaw/sandbox

Hey, I am part of the group doing an educational assignment on this page. Here is an overview of what we propose to change, in order to try and improve the neutrality and scholarly quality of the page.

In the intro, some of the language is biased and emotive,e.g.colonial power to annihilate, wipe them out. therefore, we plan to make the language neutral and more objective. We also agree with adding sight and sound as a source in the intro.

In the subject area, we have references to back up some of the points e.g. "intended eddect was the "Casbah-as-chorus", communicating with chanting, wailing and physical effect." Slow Looking: The Ethics and Politics of Aesthetics: Jill Bennett, Empathic Vision: Affect, Trauma, and Contemporary Art (Stanford, CA: Stanford University Press, 2005) Mark Reinhardt, Holly Edwards, and Erina Duganne, Beautiful Suffering: Photography and the Traffic in Pain (Chicago, IL: University of Chicago Press, 2007) Gillo Pontecorvo, director, The Battle of Algiers (Criterion: Special Three-Disc Edition, 2004) Michael J. Shapiro University of Hawai'i

Production and style - we want to edit the screenplay section quite extensively as we feel there are lots of claims or information given without references. There is also quite a bit of information given that isn't relevant to the screenplay. We would also like to add some further informartion about the visual style and techniques, which we have sources to back up with. e.g. how the film looks like a documentary. We also want to add some more information about sound and music such as the use of voiceovers and it's effect.

Post-release history - we want to change critical acclaim to critical recpetion. Also, some of the language is a bit bias in the critical acclaim section. We also want to add more and differing receptions of the film. In the Political controversies of 1960s, we want to add arguments from the director that the film was neutral and not against the French. In addition, we want to add more information about how and why the film was banned in France.