User:Enauman20/Ngil Mask/Talliejoy Peer Review

Add more content about possibly how they keep the peace between clans and villages. What rituals and ceremonies did they take part in. Just more information and context is needed. Did they have any spiritual power or symbolize anything in particular? How does one become a part of this secret male society? Also add years and clarify, when did this group start? Are they still active now? This context is important and I understand that you will add this later for the final draft. This is a good start, just make sure that you add more context and information.

Overview
These masks originate from an agrarian/hunting group known as the Fang people, located in the country of Gabon.

The Ngil
The Nigil(<Check for correct spelling) were a secret male society within the Fang people tasked with protecting and administering justice, as well as keeping peace between clans and villages. They (<-- Dont start with they, always clarify who you mean) took part in rituals and ceremonies that were intended to discourage people of the community that might have evil intentions.

The Ngil Masks
These (Ngil) masks were worn during the initiation of new members into the group or while policing communities. They are crafted with wood, which is then covered with a layer of soft white clay that is called kaolin. (Is that what the Ngil people called it?) Often, strips of rafia (Explain what rafia is) are attached to the piece (Of what?). The white color of these masks is associated with things like the spirits of ancestors, death, and male virility or manhood. (Clarify who associates the color with death? is it the people of Gabon? All of Africa? More clarification needed.)

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