User:Enelly23/Amazon (company)/TotalSustainableFuture Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Enelly23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Enelly23/Amazon_%28company%29?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Amazon (company)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The lead is strong as it is a concise statement introducing the connection between Amazon and their impact on climate change as a company. There are strong pieces of evidence and explanations to help build a foundation for the added section. A piece of advice to edit within the lead is just to explain "CSR." I had assumed "corporate social responsibility" but I would just clarify and maybe add a sentence if it is corporate social responsibility just a short definition may be helpful. Also the last sentence is a little vague, is the term "they" referring to Amazon, just clarify here. Overall, the lead is organized strategically and there are no spelling errors.

The content is very well explained and supported by statistics and reliable evidence. One area that can be improved within the content would be to include a statistic of potentially the amount of energy needed to run the warehouses or any reference in the third paragraph to help support the claims made. Overall, the content is composed very well.

The tone and balance remains neutral throughout the entire added section. There are no bias comments or persuasive tones. And the references are secondary sources which are all cited properly. In conclusion, Enelly23 drafted a strong contribution which demonstrates environmental aspect to the Amazon Company through a series of explanations and references. The content is all easy to follow and comprehend and it has a nice flow with transitions and organizational structures.