User:Enina24/Environmental movement/KeeLgd Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Enina24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Environmental movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
After looking at the draft I agree with the changes that you had made. Removing the mentioning of climate change was a good decision because if it remained in the article then we would end up talking about things that are out of scope. Removing the sentences about William Wordsworth in the History category was also good because these sentences seemed irrelevant to the topic. I see that grammar and punctuation is also being considered and changed, good.

When looking at the article I think that some changes that could be suggested involve the beginning summary. At the beginning of the article the topic of environmental movement is discussed. I feel like the definition that is used does end up falling into the definition of what environmentalism is. When I think of the environmental movement, I think of things that are happening to our environment and solutions to fixing or slowing down the problems involved with it. I don't think of human rights. I understand mentioning ecology because of the ecosystems and species being affected as well as the health of species and humans. I think that the topic of human rights begins to fall into environmentalism because it's about the rights that one has to addressing and protecting the environment on a deeper level. I think that discussing politics might be too much for this specific article. I would like to see the progression of the environmental movement when it comes to people's everyday actions (the hurtles that will be faced in the future as well) and the positive effects that come from the movement. I understand mentioning the policies that were put into place over time by political pressure, but I would also be weary of adding to much information that involves global warming.

When it comes to the category of 20th century the writing is unbalanced compared to the rest of the categories, especially the 21st century one. I would recommend adding more information to the 21st century category since it contains too little.

The category Environmentalism today I think is a problem because it might as well put the whole article under environmentalism if it's going to be talked about. There is no definition or distinction of what environmentalism is in this category which may confuse some people. This is because the enviromental movement and environmentalism is similar, yet we want to create a distinction. Many people might think that they are the same thing. When I first read this article, I thought that they were.