User:Enitalic/French Equatorial Africa/DLEE83 Peer Review

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Enitalic


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 * User:Enitalic/French Equatorial Africa


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 * French Equatorial Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article does well in analyzing the indirect rule type of Administration applied by the French in administering colonial rule in their West African colonies and the geographical division of West Africa into Territories intending to strengthen the French unpolitical power over the region. I was impressed by how the article explained the French Equatorial Africa federation was formed and its purpose, which later became a unitary body with its colonies named areas and territories (Martin, 1992); this part is apparent and needs no clarification. The phrase ‘the supreme direction of all civil and military services.' Seems to describe the subject clearly. It points to the Administration of the AEF and its leader.

I would suggest to explain how the administration process and criteria used to elect or nominate the top officials in the Administration. I would also suggest to point out the process of dividing geographical territories between France. The article should also include the services provided by the Governor-general and how the Governor impacted both the civil and military in the administration. The reader should be able to know the three constituent territories administered by the governor therefore, the article should have listed them in the article. These changes would be an improvement because they would enable the reader to fully understand the article and also know about the hierarchy of administration used in France.

The geography portion is transparent and has a good flow, giving the reader a humble and easy time reading and understanding the provided information. The article here is trying to explain how the French Equatorial was extended to different parts of Africa. The author also describes how the climate varied in those parts, and some features experienced tropical climate while others experienced Saharan climate. Amber was particularly careful in choosing the words she used. The terms relate to the article's subject matter and give a clear impression of what the author is trying to reveal.