User:Enitalic/French Equatorial Africa/Handrew2depaul Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Enitalic


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Enitalic/French_Equatorial_Africa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Some very interesting information about French Equatorial Africa, Bianca. I think this is a good addition to the original wiki article. You filled in the Administration section when time gaps were present very well. I love the idea of adding the Geography section in both French and English! Maybe sometime you could translate the other sections into french?

Things I think you could do to improve:

After your first and second paragraph I think maybe a source should be indicated.

“French Equatorial Africa began through treaties for French protection by the French explorer Pierre Savorgnan de Brazza during the mid-1800s, who convinced indigenous communities to cooperate with the French for greater trade opportunities. However, France faced retaliation from local leaders.” source?

“Perceived as unstable colonies, France granted private companies contracts for the exploitation of natural resources like ivory and rubber, rather than sustainable investment. Private companies implemented heavy taxation with little to no pay and cruel treatment towards

workers and the local communities.” source?

Possible additional information?

“In 1908 the land was divided into four colonies in hopes of strengthening French authority within the region”

You could possibly add the names of the four colonies here for additional information

You might want to reword this sentence

“Due to the very size of the territory, the climate was very varied from one point to another”

Your additions to the article were written well, with great use of the linking feature. You do well and additions to the article made the original better especially in the area of geography.