User:Eowoyele/Rural health/AbiL7 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Eowoyele


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Eowoyele/Rural_health?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rural health

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Eowoyele,

Great additions to the article providing context into rural health in Ghana. Since the article is focused on rural health in general, it can use the additions of information from other countries. The draft is a good start in adding this information! I think your further additions included the beginnings of additional insight into the political economy conversation of rural health in Ghana such as what healthcare policies have addressed rural health in particular.

It might be helpful to address the way these projects and policies are a result of larger systematic context in Ghana's healthcare, perhaps linking it to your other Wiki article.

Some grammar stuff:

In Access to Healthcare Addition:

"In rural communities, it is often hard to travel to clinics and hospitals for care and many often seek alternatives which include traditional and allopathic forms of medicine for healing "

"Ghana implemented the Community-based Health Planning and Services (CHPS) program which is designed to deliver care packages to the homes of those in rural communities, in addition to providing them with physician care ."

"There are community districts that are overstaffed, while others in rural districts are severely understaffed or lack formal clinic setups ."

In Physical Environment Addition:

"The physical isolation of some rural communities coupled with the lack of infrastructure makes it increasingly difficult for those that live in these regions to travel to seek care in clinics and hospitals ."

^ This is a well written sentence you added! Though, I suggest having other citations from the rural conditions of other countries as well to give this article more of a global perspective on rural health.

In Non Governmental Organizations (NGOs) Addition:

This is a well detailed paragraph, though it can benefit from a better transition sentence in the beginning to make sure the article flows better and lets the reader know you are about to transition to talk about Ghana for a bit.

There can also be more facts regarding how these NGOs provided for the rural communities and maybe specific examples of NGOs and their projects.