User:Eowoyele/User:Lin.jaide/Affordable housing by country/Eowoyele Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

lin.jaide


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lin.jaide/Affordable housing by country


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Affordable housing by country

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Content

The content you provide seemed relevant to the subject, especially your expansion on affordable housing in Indonesia. Your additions help the reader gain a clearer picture of how affordable housing efforts and policies have started to take shape around the world. Did you already make some of your edits live (specifically the India and Mali sections)? They seemed to be already on the main page for the article.

'''Tone and Balance ''' You maintain a neutral tone throughout your writing.

Organization

The overall writing is clear. There are a few sentence that could be broken up like:


 * This policy is intended to encourage the planning and completion of "Group Housing Projects" wherein apartments of pre-defined size are made available at pre-defined rates within a time-frame as prescribed under the present policy to ensure increased supply of Affordable Housing in the urban areas of Haryana. (from India Section)
 * suggestion: This policy is intended to encourage the planning and completion of "Group Housing Projects" wherein apartments of pre-defined size are made available at pre-defined rates within a time-frame as prescribed under the present policy. This is to ensure increased supply of Affordable Housing in the urban areas of Haryana.
 * The movement aimed to improve coordination and collaboration between local stakeholders in housing development and "improvements to the living environment," while also working to develop a housing market empowerment strategy that standardizes housing construction guidelines and public sector housing governance. (from Indonesia section)
 * suggestion: The movement aimed to improve coordination and collaboration between local stakeholders in housing development. It sought to improve the "living environment," while also working to develop a housing market empowerment strategy that standardizes housing construction guidelines and public sector housing governance.

You also mention the PPP model of development in the India section. It maybe beneficial to add a link to the wiki page on Public-Private Partnership. Try to get rid of the quotes you used. You only had two pretty minor ones, so you could definitely try to paraphrase those.