User:Eowoyele/User:Lin.jaide/Tiny-house movement/Eowoyele Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

lin.jaide


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lin.jaide/Tiny-house movement


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tiny-house movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content

You thoroughly provide more insight on this issue especially with the pros and cons section. All the information and context you provide was relevant to topic at hand. Some of your sections are already published on the main page. I don't know if you intended to do that.

Tone and Balance

Overall you are really good at maintaining a neutral encyclopedic voice throughout your writing. This sentence:

By treating homelessness as a non-familiarized issue, residents and homeowners are effectively exempt from community obligations towards the well-being and sheltering of other community members experiencing homelessness.

feels a bit like essay prose and a bit persuasive. You could revise it or even omit it.

Organization

Your additions are organized and really clear. You have some quotes, but I believe a lot of them are useful and work for the page. The quote towards the end of the pros and cons section:

While modern U.S. society has statistically experienced a growing need for human services and welfare, researchers have acknowledged that “The stigmatization of persons and places are thus mutually constitutive of community rejection and organized resistance to human service facility sitting.”

should be paraphrased though.

You could also add a hyperlink where you bring up institutional discrimination. Also make sure that all of sources work for Wikipedia, because one of them was flagged as being an irrelevant citation.

Other than that your contribution is really well done.