User:Epbvx6/Space medicine/DaleHabe Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Epbvx6


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Epbvx6/sandbox


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I don't see a very strong connection between talking wheelchairs and space medicine so maybe point out the connection a little more. The development of the kidney dialysis machine is very neat and ties in nicely. The tone is good, and there are no biases. Its well organized and easy to read. The first link in the references takes me to a page that is not found. Also the references are just the url's so maybe try and find an author name and other info when referencing them ~

Peer Review Response to DaleHabe

Thank you for reviewing my work. The link to final report of the Versatile Portable Speech Prosthesis was removed from the NASA website. With the help of Dr. Sheppard, I was able to find a different think of the same source, so I have re-cited that link in my sandbox. I will go back and turn my other links in my sandbox into proper citations. I need to organize my sandbox better and add section titles. I was also concerned about tying versatile portable speech prosthesis and space medicine, but what I've read in the source of the Final Report, The Research and Development of the Versatile Portable Speech Prosthesis, is that "In many cases, the connection of the project with NASA was mentioned, for it is not widely known that NASA participates in projects which are not aviation or space related". However, this is something I can still look into to tie both VSP and space medicine together.