User:Epickerill/Ivy League/Avery Shunneson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Epickerill


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Epickerill/Ivy_League?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ivy League

Evaluate the drafted changes
Evaluation of the two proposed section of Racial Segregation

Lead:

There is no change to the lead of the article but I don't know if one is necessarily required. Possible the addition of one sentence explaining how racial segregation was a part of the history of the league but maybe not necessary.

Content:

The content is relevant to the rest of the page. Sources are up to date and reliable. Additional sections definitely deal with wikipedia's equity gaps.

Tone and Balance:

The tone is very neutral and information is well balanced. Nothing is repeated and there is a nice flow to the information. Very well written.

Sources and References:

The only critique that I can think of is the beginning of the section is heavily reliant on Stefan's novel and it might be a good idea to incorporate other sources that support the same information.

Overall:

Amazing and important additions to the page!