User:Epickerill/Ivy League/Jasonbb1233 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ivy League


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Epickerill/Ivy_League?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Epickerill/Ivy_League?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

A lot of things to admire here. I think that there are a lot of great sources and information. There clearly is a sense that this project is well-researched. I also liked the commentary you have from the 20th-century, I think it was very balanced and provided neutral information. The content is definitely relevant to the topic, but there is still more you can add. Perhaps a story about a specific person, or more information about specific universities? It seems like you have a lot of general information, but you may be well-served by some specificity. Also, you could structure your points in another way other than just chronologically. What about any notable BIPOC alumni? Any specific events or pushback? Also, you can add a lead that describes what the idea is. However, I do think that the content is easy to read, clear and concise. It wasn't too argumentative, although there was definitely an overall chastising tone. The article also follows all of the notability guidelines as highlighted in Wikipedia. One thing that you could add is some more media. Maybe a photo or something to break up the amount of text you have. Nonetheless, you could add some more information beyond history, which you may have and that I would be interested in seeing.