User:Eresha8/Hypnotherapy/Denisej 2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Eresha8


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Eresha8/Hypnotherapy?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hypnotherapy

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Since I can see that the content of the article is still being arranged and updated, I think it is good you have not edited the lead yet just to make sure you do not leave anything out. I would suggest formatting a introductory sentence just so you do not leave that out. The content added is relevant to the topic, especially from the cultural perspective. I think it will be beneficial to readers to have access to both a scientific and also social (cultural) perspective so I think it is great you added that. Regarding Shamanism section, I would be mindful of the wording so it does not seem like a connection being made between two different topics.

The organization of your edits are beneficial to the article especially with the cultural section being added below "Traditional hypnotherapy" to show you are beginning to expand on other types. I also think the pictures you are planning to add would help the article become more stimulating to the reader.

Regarding tone, your statements are concise and clear along with words of neutral connotation. (I would look into the use of the word "interesting" just in case it could be seen as biased language.) Like previously stated, I would just make sure that connections between different topics are not being made. I also think you have strong sources by using reviews and meta-analyses. I would also see if you could find any general definitions from reliable textbook sources if you are struggling with finding a clear definition.