User:Ergyyq/Sorosis/MatthewAYoung Peer Review

General info
Ergyyq
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ergyyq/Sorosis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Sorosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how you reorganized the section with the reasoning for the club being made at the forefront of the section instead of it just being lost in the middle of the section. I also really enjoy the the fact that they held there meeting in the same restaurant that they were denied from. I will say though there is a lack of cited references in your new section so be sure to add those to your new piece. I also feel that you should add back the section about when the club was initially founded before it became incorporated as I don't think you gain anything from removing that piece of information. Your new section is a good piece of information to add to the article as currently there, anyways in a quick look through, is zero mention of what actually went on during the meetings. I really think if you flesh out that section a little bit more that it will be a very good addition to the original article.