User:Eric Heldt/Arboreal locomotion/Pancakes2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Eric Heldt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Eric%20Heldt/Arboreal_locomotion?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Arboreal locomotion
 * Arboreal locomotion

Evaluate the drafted changes
This article seems to have been updated in a way that adds information to the article in a balanced way. The changes add relevant information and are backed by reputable sources. In addition, the author has included sources for previously unsourced information in the original article.

The author has made attempts to alter the awkward sentence structure of some of the original article's sentences, but I believe further grammatical improvements could be made to improve readability.

Examples (Diameter section): "While during..." could be "During arboreal locomotion...

"Resulting in a tendency..." could be "This results in a tendency..."