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=Wikipedia's Dead Silence article for ENGL1101.27= Sandbox for Erica Hudson

Analysis of Article
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Reading List
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 * Green, Josh. (2007).Review: Dead Silence is Freakin' Scary!
 * Hernandez, Christopher. (2007) Dead Silence: Plot Summary
 * Stryker, Johnathan. (2007). Dead Silence Movie Review.

Original
Getting ready for dinner one night, Jamie Ashen and his wife Lisa receive a mysterious ventriloquist doll named "Billy", in an unmarked package. Wondering who sent the doll, Lisa recalls a poem about a woman named Mary Shaw. Jamie disregards this and leaves to get dinner. After Lisa plays around with Billy, all the sounds disappear and something attacks Lisa. When Jamie arrives with their dinner, he hears Lisa call him into the bedroom, but becomes confused when he notices blood all over the floor. Jamie finds Lisa in their bed, dead with her tongue ripped out, and Billy lying near her body. Detective Jim Lipton brings Jamie in for questioning of the murder of his wife, but releases him due to lack of evidence. While ripping the lining of the box Billy came in, Jamie discovers that Billy belonged to Mary Shaw, a ventriloquist from his hometown of Ravens Fair.

Revised
One night while preparing for dinner Jamie and his wife Lisa, received an unmarked package a ventriloquist doll named Billy. Lisa then recites a poem about a women named Mary Shaw, Jamie just laughs it off and goes and picks up dinner, when he returns home he finds a trail of blood and Lisa nowhere in sight. Jamie goes in to the bed room with the doll on the floor and and Lisa's dead body without a tongue in it. Detective Jim Lipton brings him in for questioning but ends up realseasing him. Jamie returns back to the apartment and finds out who the doll belongs to which is Mary Shaw a ventriloquist fro his hometown Ravens Fair.

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