User:Erick.merc/Travis Thompson/Kaig2000 Peer Review

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Erick.merc


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 * User:Erick.merc/Travis Thompson


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== Hey Erick, Overall I thought you did an excellent job offering background regarding Thompsons' musical influence. I think you structured your draft really well, beginning with upbringing and later tying in his early career. You might consider adding more facts about his upbringing: parents names, early history to balance the musical influence... I also noticed that you didn't cite your information, this might be more difficult since he's an up and coming (?) artist but citing interviews etc. might be helpful in preventing reviewers from flagging your work while also proving your credibility. I know this is only a rough draft, but in the future I think it would be awesome to see a little more detail throughout your work. You note that Thompson went on tour, maybe include the name of the tour and perhaps who he toured with...? details might help to flush everything out and make your writing seem a little less subjective. Your writing seems to fall under "musical influence" so you might consider adding that as a heading. Finally, I noticed a couple typos so I might recommend just going back and rereading. Again, overall great job! ==