User:Ericklemusss/Education of immigrants in the United States/Grace.jana07 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ericklemusss


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ericklemusss/Education_of_immigrants_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Education of immigrants in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lovely additions! My takes are as follows:

- The new section you've drafted on racial differences in educational attainment is well-written, clear, concise, and informative, and definitely an important addition to the article as a whole. I assume you're getting rid of the 'Gender' section entirely, and replacing it with the 'Racial differences' section? If so, I think that's great--maybe since it has that last sentence about gendered difference in Black populations, you could call the section 'Racial and gender disparity in immigrant education attainment' if you want to be comprehensive? Or just 'disparities in immigrant educational attainment' if you want to be more general? Knit-picky either way, so do as you see fit of course.

- Did you change anything in that paragraph in the 'immigrant integration' section? I didn't notice if you did, or the key may be in need of updating.

- Can you hyperlink to pages about ESL programs? I think that would be interesting for further readings once your changes are published :)

Can't wait to see your final products <3