User:Ericksmd3839/Epidemiology of suicide/Kyleechoate Peer Review

General info
Ericksmd3839
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ericksmd3839/Epidemiology_of_suicide?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like how you added more sub-sections regarding race and sexual orientation. I think it's important that you provided statistics bases on race, and, additionally were inclusive of groups who have not been well-represented in the past. In the Race section, could you provide a statistic of how much suicide has increased in Asian and Pacific-Island countries? I think it that would add to the fact that suicide is becoming a more increasing issue each year.

In the Sexual Orientation section, I noticed a lot of blanks (______). I'm assuming that you're meaning to fill those in, but if not, I'm just letting you know that they're there!

In the Mental Illness section, instead of using wording like "high-income countries" and "low-income countries," could you provide a definition or more concrete explanation as to what is considered high/low income? This change isn't essential to the article, but I think it would give the reader more of a defined explanation as to what is considered "high-income" or "low-income."